VCCS Litonline
"Love and Licorice" page 2
VCCS Litonline
"Love and Licorice" page 2
| 5 Nor is it honest. Rather than admit
the fact that he doesn’t want the responsibility of a baby, Jig’s lover tries to
flatter her by saying, "I don’t want anybody but you." He also avoids
taking any blame for their faltering relationship. After all, being pregnant is "the
only thing" that has made them unhappy. He makes light of the abortion by telling
her, "It’s not really an operation" and that it’s "perfectly
simple," even "natural." Of course, she "doesn’t" have to if
she "doesn’t want to," but he knows that it’s "the best thing to
do." Best for whom, I wonder.
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5 Notice how the last sentence of the 4th paragraph and the opening sentence of the 5th paragraph draw us along from one section of the essay to another--and echo the thesis from the 1st paragraph. This transition reminds readers of the thesis and gives the impression that the evidence just read and the evidence coming up are organized to support the writer’s view of the story. This paragraph shows the strategies of the man in this situation. The next shows those of the woman. The last sentence is a lost opportunity, though. Instead of implying the man’s selfishness, the student should point out his flaws directly in order to show how they cause the conflict. (continued on next page) |
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